As the dark night clouds slithered like a snake through the dark the sky. It was the 5th night of the in the UNSINKABLE Titanic the largest vessel built by mankind and also the largest moving object that sailed the water in 1912. A man named Shaun slept through one of the nights that might be his last night alive.
Shaun’s mind had flooded with thoughts from his journey when he was apart of the army. The reason why he was on the Titanic was he had to travel from Boston to ireland because there seemed to be a war that broken out. There was half a voyage to go. But what they didn't know is that the Irish terrorists spotted the vessel and were boarding the ship and were going to invade it.
“What the” Shaun awoke to a strange noise like footsteps creeping through the abandoned hall. Shaun jumped out of bed and sprinted for his ak47 and slowly trotted for the door. As Shaun peaked through the door he saw a man creeping down the cordial with blue gear approaching his door . Shaun took action and slammed the door in his face and shot him.Shaun crept to the front of the ship were all the terrorists were gathered. Will Shaun make it out or will he get caught find out in the next episode TO BE CONTINUED..................
A very interesting version of the Titanic. I am really impressed by the way you have described the setting. As the reader I know where you are and your purpose for being there. For your next episode: what is a word or words that you could use instead of using Shaun again and again? If you use other words to tell the reader it is Shaun then it will make your story not feel repetitive. Also what did he hear, smell, feel? Looking forward to reading the next episode :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Mr Bax :)
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