Friday, 10 May 2013
Will.i.am
Today an exciting guest came to our school he was a world famous sensation it is Will.i.am. He talked to us about picking the best friends to help you in the future and to help you accomplish your dreams in reality. and he also he told us we can be the next big thing. And because we have technology to help us learn and because of that he had donated us and the maniakalani trust 100,000 dollars.
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Hey I love what you have posted about Will.I.Am my favorite part was when you said about him donating 100,000 dollars.Just remember to read it out loud to yourself and get a buddy to read your writing.
ReplyDeleteKEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.
ReplyDeleteHey Louis
I really enjoyed reading your story, I LOVED the way you used the word Sensation, that sure is a big word for a little year 5 like you! And hey, just remember that Capital Letter's come after a full stop
Keep up the good work, and keep BLOGGING!
Hi Louis,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story. My Favourite part is your first line of your paragrapher. But the thing you need to work on is you capital letters. But keep up the great work.
Hi Louis
ReplyDeleteI really like your post about Will.I.Am It was very cool and interesting I really like to see more from you and I love your first line of your sentence. Well keep up the good work Louis I hope to see more from you.
Wow Louis that story was so cool and interesting.I loved it but member that after a full stop is capital letter.I cant wait to see what eels your going to be posting on your blog this term.
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Hi Louis,
ReplyDeleteWow I really liked your writing about will.i.am it was really interesting and cool. next time make sure you put in Capital Letter's after a full stop but great job.